Introduction to Composition 110
Taylor Bingham, Fall 2015, Beth Undem
Introduction by Taylor Bingham
Features of a Thesis Statement
Depression is a serious mood disorder that makes a person have a constant feeling of sadness. It is more than just a temporary feeling and cannot be overcome by willpower (“Teen depression”). This disorder can occur at any time in a person’s life, but 20 percent of teens will have some sort of depressive disorder before they are 20-years-old (Pereira). Depression requires treatment to be improved. Depression affects how teens will think, behave, and feel in their daily life. It causes emotional, functional, and physical problems (“Teen depression”). This disorder affects teens differently than other ages. It is also more likely for teens to become diagnosed with depression because they experience many highs and lows, which makes them more susceptible to getting a depressive disorder (“Teen Depression”). More people should become aware of the symptoms, causes, treatments, and prevention of depression in teens.
This is a good thesis because it tells exactly what someone would read in the rest of my research essay. The main idea is the symptoms of depression, the causes, the treatments, and how to prevent depression. It is general enough to be applied to other essays as well.
Direct sentence from the website: In some teens, depression is so severe that a hospital stay is needed, especially if you teen is in danger of self-harm or hurting someone else.
Notes taken: Hospitalization, severe depression, harm
Summarized sentence: In some very extreme cases, teens can even be hospitalized for extended amounts of time for their safety ("Teen depression").
This is a good summarized sentence because I am taking the main point of the direct sentence, but rephrasing it enough that now it is in my own words. It also has a parenthetical to show that it is not my idea.
This disorder can occur at any time in a person’s life, but 20 percent of teens will have some sort of depressive disorder before they are 20-years-old (Pereira).
A parenthetical was needed after this sentence because it has statistics in it and just the author's last name was needed.
Pereira, Susan L., Mari Egan, and James J. Stevermer. "Screen Teens For Depression-- It's Quicker Than You Think." Journal Of Family Practice 59.11 (2010): 643-644. Health Source: Nursing/Academic Edition. Web. 2 Dec. 2015.
This is one of my sources that I used in my research essay that was cited correctly. To have a complete research essay, a person needs to reference the sources from which their borrowed information comes.
*Note: the second two lines of the citation should be indented.
Comparison and Contrast