Sentence Fluency

Using Variation

Look for...


  • Varied structures
  • Varied lengths
  • Varied beginnings
  • Short, choppy sentences are combined
  • Quotes are embedded for a smooth flow

Example Revision

Notice the original paragraph several sentences that begin the same way with similar sentence structures throughout. The paragraph on the left is the revised version with different sentence structures and transitional phrases to help the examples flow together.
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Embedding Quotes

Dropped - Causes choppy sentence structure

Holden becomes frustrated and decides to leave. “People are always ruining things for you” (Salinger 88).


Embedded - Creates a flowing sentence structure

Holden becomes frustrated and decides to leave, claiming that “people are always ruining things for you” (Salinger 88).