Journalism performance final
February edition
The Loneliness of Vladimir Putin #1 (longform)
Critique
The author gets the real Russia into the light: a tyrannical, communistic, and unstable country. The Russian governmet is guilty of unjust arrest and brutality; in fact, Russian police beat a man for throwing a lemon at one of them. Not only that, corruption is rampant throughout the Russian government. For example, one of Putin's friends is being charged for funneling 2$ million out of the country. Putin is too incompetent to run the country and should be impeached from office. On another note, the style of the article is great.
Putin party
Lemon man
" Bond, James Bond."
Critique #2
The author expresses an patriotic view in the article; this article would be for people who are concerned about America. He exposes the corruption in the United States government and preaches for a change leadership. On another note, the style of the article is great; He speaks the voice that know citizen has. This article fits under Op-ed.
Roger
The constitution
Satire
Critique #3
The author's objective for the article is to tell how CDC is planning on stopping outbreaks; the intended audience are people who care about the possibilities of diseases. The author does not present any viewpoints whatsoever; this article is meant to simply inform people of what CDC is doing new.Stylistically, the auther is straightforward and just p[resents the necessary information, which I like. This article would fit under feature.
What if?
chikungunya virus
West nile virus
critique #4
The article, in my opinion, is emotionally endearing and nice. I love how the author uses his past tragedies as a way to connect to the story; the writing style of the article speaks of someone who has a heart. This article should be under Op-ed
Critique#5
The is article is informative for people who care about the educational system. The author wrote this in order to inform the populace about the lagging educational system. The one problem about this article is that it doesn't bother to interview the students about the issue. Given the fact that their the products of system, it would be interesting to hear their insight. The style is concise; I like it. This would fit under feature of the The Roar.
Saving Relics, Afghans defy the Taliban
Critique#6
The article presents the crisis happening West Virginia clearly, but could expand on viewpoints. The author seems to stride more on the environmental group's side rather than expose the reader to perspective of industry's side. Other than that, there isn't much to change about the article. This could fit in feature portion our school newspaper.
Critque #7
The new York times is known for its lengthy articles and the amount of details in their typical article. The article presents it point very clearly: ancient relics have been recovered; no ambiguity whatsoever. This could fit in the feature section of our school newspaper.
Saudis back Syrian rebels despite risks
Critique #8
This article is great for people who have a love for planets or science in general. The article doesn't present any viewpoints but is very informative. This article could fit in the feature page of the school newspaper.
Happy Birthday,Mr.Dictator: Rodman sings to Kim Jung Ill
Critique#9
The article presents the story as if it's a novel; it goes into great depth and presents minor details that typical articles don't present. They take note on the way Abu looks and how he reacts to certain comments or questions. There is nothing to change about the overall structure of the paragraph. This can fit in the feature portion of the The roar.
critique#10
The overall structure of the essay is perfect. The article leaves little trace of personal biases and is straightforward. The article informs readers whom want to know about any major scandals, particular international ones. There isn't much to write to write about this article.
Critque #11
Science and major fields have high drop out rates as STEM students switch to other majors. Although students grow up liking math and science through elementary and high school, this growth is deterred as STEM students go through introductory math and science classes. Politicians and colleges are finding ways to combat this problem of the dwindling STEM majors.
The article is for people who want to know more about the lack of STEM-related employees. The article is a feature personal biases are in this article. The article overall is perfect and i love everything about it. This article should be under feature.
Critique #12
This article is good for people who want to know the effects of time for school to start on students. This article presents all sides equally and that's what I like about. The structure of the article is perfect. This should be labeled under feature.
Critique # 13 (longform)
The article is good for people who love history. The article tell it like a story teller would do and i approve of it. The structure is good. This would fit under feature.
Crtique #14 (longform)
The article is good for people who want to know more about the criminal psyche. The article is told from the perspective of someone who lived during the paranoia era of Scarborough. The article's structure is good. This should be under Op-Ed.
Crtique #15 (longform)
The article is good for people who want to know the struggles of what it's like to be gay in the military. It gives nice insight on how Stephen struggled with being gay. The article structure's perfect and i nothing to complain about. This should be under OP-Ed.
Critique# 16
This article is good for people who want to know more about the corruption in the F.D.A. The author presents a view against the high cost of medication and how the F.D.A is creating a monopoly for pharmaceutical companies. The article structure is perfect and i don't want to change anything about it. This should be labeled under op-ed.
Critique #17 (longform)
The article is good for people who want to know more about the personal accounts of solders in Iraq. The article structure is perfect and doesn't need any revisions. This should be labeled under Op-Ed.
Critique #18
The article is good for people who want to know more about Federal spending. The article presents a bias view against Congress but overall the structure and everything is perfect. This should be under feature.
Critique # 19
This article is good for people who like science fiction. the presents a view that science fiction movie are anti-colonist and such. Everything about this article is perfect and I don't think anything needs to be revised. This should be under OP-ed.
Critique # 20
This article is for people who like information about our solar system. Since this article is a feature, it does not present any views whatsoever. Other than a few typos, everything about the article is perfect. This article should be under feature.