Introduction to Composition 110
Samantha Wieland-Fall 2015-Beth Undem
Introduction by User 268625899
Characteristics of a Thesis Statement
"The truth is that by just changing the location, from the theater to home, or vise versa, many differences are brought about."
"Some of these details that should be considered when deciding which career to pursue include the job itself, the qualities required, the education and skills, the salary and projected growth, the hours and working conditions, and the services provided to the community."
Take notice of how both of these examples are broad statements that could eventually shape the essay or paper by being proved through data or different perspectives. They are both considered well-written theses because they are general representations of the most important topic, which are then further supported by ideas and facts throughout the essay and paper.
Correctly Referencing Sources
An orthodontist must go on and complete an orthodontist residency, which is both coursework and training (Davenport).
The works cited page, which will list the detailed sources used to find the information, should be at the end of the paper on a separate page. These sources should be in alphabetical order, double line spaced, and any line of one source after the first should be indented. For instance the cited source below does not fit on one line so 2015 becomes indented on the following line. To get a better idea of how this page should look with other sources, there is a link to my research paper above in my summarizing description. The works cited can be found on the last page.
Davenport, Tammy. "How to Become an Orthodontist." About.com Careers. About Careers. *Web. 25 Nov. 2015.
*Smore website does not allow this line to be tabbed in.
Peer Editing: Verb Tense Shift
Incorrect: My heart sunk, as I had been looking forward to this moment for the longest time and now it had changed to nothing I ever expected. I was confident in my driving. I knew that running a red light was not okay, but I had other things on my mind than the task at hand. I was caught up in thinking ahead. I had never been so ashamed as I was in that very moment.
Correct: My heart sank, as I had been looking forward to this moment for the longest time and now it had changed to nothing I ever expected. I had been confident in my driving. I knew that running a red light was not okay, but I had other things on my mind than the task that was at hand. I was caught up in thinking ahead. I had never been so ashamed as I was at that very moment.
Weak Nouns and Verbs
Weak: I got a vehicle for my graduation present.
Strong: I got a white, 2014 Toyota Camry for my graduation present.
Weak: I went to the store yesterday.
Strong: I rode my bike to the store yesterday.
The key to finding and fixing these nouns and verbs is to look for a place in the essay, when editing it, that doesn't form a clear picture of either what the noun looks like or what the verb's action is. To help with converting nouns and verbs to be more specific, it is a good idea to go to the thesaurus for help. Just by doing something as simple as this, it makes the writing much more entertaining and catching for the audience.
Reflection of Myself