Journalism Performance Final
By: Christine D. Sterling
Journal #1: Inside the Solange-Jay Z-Beyonce Family Feud
Summary- The article most essential aspects would be when the author shows a video of beyonce sister Solange attacking Beyonce's husband Jayz in the elevator And how soon later Beyonce posted a prayer on her instagram account that would relate to any hindurance or difficult obstacle one is facing. she says "Help me to choose my friends wisely so I won't be led astray," it says. "Give me discernment and strength to separate myself from anyone who is not a good influence." This quote meaning please guide me along the way, surrounding myself with only positively and less negativity. Please allow me to be strong and face all of my hardships. This quote that the author states is very essential because in some way it relates to the situation that was going on i, it expresses Beyonce's perspective on the situation. It says much but not too much! I think this piece of evidence, piece of proof is wonderful for the article because it supports the articles argument. As you read towards the end of the article the author discusses Beyonce and her sister Solange relationship, how they always been close and Beyonce parents not wanting her sister to go through the same things in the spotlight, being a public figure and all like Beyonce.
- I would describe the author style as very informative, describes in great detail.
Keeps the reader interested so that they want to continue reading.
- The intended audience or in other words the target audience would be anyone that likes entertainment. The audience could also be the public, because after the incident with Solange and Jayz in the elevator, the public wants to know if Beyonce and known rapper Jayz are in a relationship or not in a relationship. Everyone wants to know what is going on with Beyonce and her family, its entertainment it gives people something to talk about.
-The author establishes tone by being informative with information, the author is straight to the point and does a great job with being descriptive and explaining why things happened the way they happened.
-The author establishes story telling by expressing the cause of the event and what was the over all outcome from the circumstance
- As for literary devices the author uses allusion- Uses previous evidence to support whats being stated, amplification- author is very clear and descriptive with whats being stated, goes in dept.
_ The style is perfect for the story because she is describing Beyonce's family feud. How Beyonce and Jayz have not spoke on the issue and seem to be on good terms. The author talks about what happen and what occurred after the fact.
-The nutgraf of the story or the the so what paragraph would be " That didn't quite pan out, as the aspiring artist got pregnant at the age of 17 and soon married her son's father" This is the so what paragraph because Beyonce sister getting pregnant at a young age does not have anything to do with what happen with Jayz and Solange in the elevator. This part could of been taken out because its gratuitous, it doesn't really have anything to do with the situation. Yes its relevant but that's more of Solange personal life, that is whole another topic, article.
-The primary source the author could not write the article without would be quotes that Solange said about her and Beyonce's relation ship and social media post from Beyonce and Solange. The author would need some sort of evidence to prove what she is stating so she couldn't write the article without some input from Solange or Beyonce.
- Challenges that would come with reporting this story would be people having an opinion and say of what happen because everyone mate not believe that this story is true. People may have heard the story differently previously or believed it happened a different way.
Not only that finding and interview or a conference where Solange is opening up about her family's personal life would be major challenge because public figures with so much fame don't usually open up about their personal life. A challenging part for me would be finding the evidence the most accurate piece information that proves what im trying to state.
- This article would be located in the entertainment part of of our newspaper.
-The article strengths would be that its straight to the point, it doesn't exaggerate too much. It has quotes and evidence to prove what the author states, The author insures to state their personal opinion.
- I can agree the structure was chosen well for the topic.
- The article is thoroughly reported it informs the public of what they want to know and what they need to know, says enough but not too much.
- To me the style doesn't get in the way when reporting because of what the article is choosing to discuss. Its talking about issues that occur within Beyonce and Jayz family.
- This would be a particular story that is temporary, im not going to say it wont be relevant in the next five years. I'm just going to say time moves on the clock remains ticking. What went on happened already. It will probably be considered old news in the next five years. I think as time moves on things change and in the next five years their will be some other feud or altercation people will be talking about. Drama is temporary new things happen everyday, For instance now, today august 2014 this feud is not as much of a topic of discussion as when this issue initially happened because of evolution. Not to say that everyone dead the issue, that they completely forgot about it but once the public has a say and every one has gotten their voice heard their is really nothing to talk about, until the next issue begins.
Journal #2: 5 Awesome Things Apple’s New iPhone 6 Is Rumored to Have
Summary- You heard of the iPhone 6 but don't really know what its about? Well let me tell you supposedly the iPhone 6 is going to be capable of having near field communication allowing you to make purchases right of your smartphone, quick and easy. The iPhone is also appose to have sapphire glass insuring that your iPhone will be more protected and less fragile. An if your one that likes a larger view, and watches moves on your device. The iPhone 6 may be a perfect match being that apple is supposedly appose to have two iPhone's coming out in different sizes the 4.7 inch screen and the 5.5 inch screen. Although this is the only beginning apple users will also get their hands on apples new processor ios 8. I have to say i am excited, The iPhone 6 is said to have new features and capabilities and apple has not once led us wrong so lets hope for the best only success.
-I would describe the authors writing style as expository because the author insures to state information about new features and processes the iPhone 6 will include. The author states accurate information leaving out their personal opinion.
- The intended audience would be the public and any individual that pursues an interest in electronics and technology.
-The author uses tone by talking in 1st person, making the reader feel some type away, the reader feels as if they are a part of the discussion.
- The author establish story telling by being very informative and descriptive. The author insures to use good diction, word choice.
- Yes i would say the author uses analogy because the author compares the iPhone 5s to the iPhone 6 but not only that the author uses connotation insuring that the individual develops a personal perspective.
-Does the style get in a way of the story? Not at all the style is perfect because the article is meant to let you know whats going on and be informative. Its letting you know all the features and capabilities the phone 6 has, so i think the style is great!
- The nut-graf of the story would be when the author talks about how some people complained about the size of iPhone and how fragile the iPhone is.
-The most key source in the story is when the author mentions a man by the name of Dutch Chipmaker how he is going to be a participant in working with apple for National Field Communications. Meaning that apple users can make payments and do purchases straight from their apple product.
-Challenges that come with this story would be finding proof, evidence to support or agree with what your talking about. Most importantly you have to make sure the information you have found is accurate, because you want to be known as a reliable source. So yeah i think that would be the most challenging part or hindrance when it comes to writing articles and story's. For this particular article especially because apple usually keeps information of their products discreet and a secret until they choose to reveal information.
- This article would be located in the entertainment section or technology section in our school magazine.
- The articles strengths would be grasping readers attention. Being straight to the point not rambling along for century's and using outside sources to support whats being stated.
- The structure was good. I wouldn't say the article is thoroughly reported. I would say its very well done, although the author could of add a second key source and a little bit of more information.
-The style does not get in the way of of being reported. The style to me is very well appropriate it has subtitles to distinguish topic to topic and is very well done and straight to the point.
-A suggestion i would make just to give the article a little more sense of style would be for the article to add maybe a form of alliteration and irony to make the article a little bit more fun and entertaining. Besides that i think the article was good and beneficial. Now if you ask me would this be an article that relevant in the next 5 years i am going to say no. Only because of evolution. Things change people change and most importantly circumstances change, an in the next 5 years most likely theirs going to be a new cellular device that everyone has. Their is going to be a new topic of discussion. People may re-visit the story just to see how the cellular device they have then is different from the iPhone that was out before. Although i think their would be no need to because most likely the phone that is out in the next 5 years will be so advanced within its craft that their would be no reason to look back at the old iPhone.
- As for where the article is at now. The article is steady, theirs nothing people can do, another article can do but wait until the new iPhone is released and hope that it lives up to most peoples expectations.
Journal#3: LongForm Article: Hollywood's Big-Money YouTube Hit Factory
Summary: The most essential aspects of the article would be when the author talks about Brian Robbins and his prior experience in the entertainment industry. How he was an actress, a well known participant in ABC family and other sitcoms. How he admired and appreciated the opportunity of becoming a teenage star and was willing to guide and help others to be known in entertainment industry. He created a production, a channel on YouTube called awesomeness TV where any individual can join and he would guide them, give them the steps to success. Robbins knew that the same people uploading videos to YouTube would be the same people to join his channel. He had a goal to reach and he reached his goal indeed as views began to progress, capitalist began to invest and because of high publicity and ratings Robbins decided to sell his company (Hollywood studio) for $33 billion and later on as the company's net worth begins to increase, he would receive an income of $84 billion. Robbin only continues to be pragmatic and handle things accordingly. His ambitious attitude insures that failure is never to be in existent.
-I would describe the authors writing style as less entertaining and more informative.
-The audience would be anybody that's interested, in the entertainment industry any individual that has an interest for watching YouTube videos.
- The author establishes story telling by often stating situations that previously happened that he has experienced and then in some what way relating or including that to what he is going to talk about. For instance when he was talking about his sons, how he noticed that the entertainment was no longer in broadcast or T V. It was on YouTube online, The access of having quick information delivered in a video was more essential, in which most people were adjusting too. Robin compares and contrast the difference between the entertainment industry back then and the entertainment industry now.
-The authors writing style is very explanatory, instructive i would say Felix Gillette the author describes events by using the causing and effect method. He tells the reader what happen and why what happen happened.
- The author uses tone by being and being concise. The author insures to make sure that the reader understands and comprehends.
-Literary devices that the author uses would be alliteration and amplification . The author often uses words that sound alike and have similar pronunciation and when he discusses how Google invested in YouTube he uses amplification by including a lot of facts and data argument and whats being stated.
- I think the style is good for the story because the author is informing you about what he knows and what has happened and what made him want to pursue an interest in YouTube and the entertainment industry.
-The nut-graf of the story would be when the author talks about how the early YouTube entertainers tended to be outsiders and proceeded to talk about how they marketed and invested in their videos. yes this is important for the reader to know because what happened previously is essential but the reader is more focused on whats happening now and what is predicted to be the future. What happened before is good information but i wouldn't say it is needed .
- The primary source meaning the source the author could not write with out would be a male by the name of Kreiz he is the corporate executive officer of maker studios, a production in which an artist can reach their full potential and influence their target audience.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this story would be getting outside sources, getting people to people to speak on and support what your trying to do. Another would be accumulating your information from the right sources, making sure your information is accurate and the writing part of reporting this story because when your writing you want to explain,entertain and ask questions, include sources and most importantly keep the reader interested because if the reader is not interested the reader wont proceed on reading about the following topic.
-This article would be located in the entertainment section or business/economic section. I say business section because YouTube is a production, corporation and entertainment because YouTube main purpose to entertain and inform.
-The articles strengths is that it includes a lot of information, the author is specific and clear about what he chooses to discuss, but not only that the author talks about him self as a teenager pursuing a career in the entertainment industry. How it has helped him what he has learned and developed.
-The article is thoroughly reported, enough information is stated from authors personal experience, from researched information found and authors key sources.
-One specific suggestion would be to include reader more in the discussion, insure that the reader can feel what your saying and not just know and understand what your saying. Ask more questions. Inform and state details in a way that is fun and sophisticated.
Journal#4: Kim Kardashian, Queen of Narcissism
Summary: What do you think of when you hear the word celebrity and then the word Kim? You think of Kim Kardashian and speaking on Kim Kardashian, recently she has joined a new venture with taking selfies, now those of you that don't know what that means. It means that she has an obsession of taking multiple pictures of herself. Being that Kim has found this new hobby. Kim now has decided to accumulate a bunch of pictures to make a selfie book called "selfish" for her husband/ known wrapper name Kanye West. Off course people are going to have their opinion and say 385 pictures of just of you by yourself and nothing else. That is alot of pictures but this is only the beginning. People are going to think want they think and rumors are going to continue to accumulate and assume but Kim Kardashian will continue to remain relevant within public relations and be superior.
--I would describe the author writing style as compare and contrast because he is informing the reader about Kim Kardashians extravagant lifestyle. How she shows of her body, looks presentable at all times and most importantly has money that this the reason she is a successful star today. Cause and effect wold be another style that is expressed throughout book. Gentlemen by the name of Pepper Schwartz this article talks about Kim Kardashians come up and where she as it now. He talks about she got famous and what she has been up to now that she is famous.
-The intended audience would be anyone that wants to know about the entertainment industry, the public media and anyone else that wants to know about Kim Kardashisans selfie book.
-The author uses tone by ask questions, includes reader in the conversation and gives his personal opinion. He also is very straight foward and direct.
- Schwartz tells the story in 3rd person he focuses words such as, we, us, and most of us. He insures that the reader is included in discussion and can formulate their own opinion based on what he is stating.
-The author uses some similes and metaphors. A few hyperbole (exaggeration) is expressed.
-The style is perfect for the story. Author often compares and contrast, with a little bit of cause effect displayed which is beneficial because author is informing you about Kim Kardashian's life. The author talks about how Kim Kardashian is an idol, how young girls look up to her and how people admire the extravagant lifestyle she lives.
-The nut-graf of the story would be "Instead of sending Kim K to the bank, let's encourage her to go to a really good therapist. This kind of narcissism needs to be treated, not celebrated" This quote specifically because author stated his opinion and the reader may think something else and it could cause a debate when negative personal perspective advice or opinion is not a necessity.
-Author mentions his icons when he were younger but no key sources were stated.
-Challenges that would come with this story is doing with author shouldn't of done. Leaving your opinion out of the topic of discussion because giving your opinion with not enough accurate information to support the reason you feel causes more people to disagree with you. Challenging parts for me would be staying task, learning how to transition from talking about topic from topic and keeping readers attention.
-This article would be most likely located in the entertainment section of our newspaper. -The articles strengths would be that he asked a lot of questions, kept reader interested he didn't go on and on and try to amplify things he stated his point and was straight to the point.
-One specific suggestion that i would say is to inform explain and entertain which this you did but try to exclude personal opinion because its up for the reader develop their own opinion, weather they agree or disagree.
Journal#5: Giants vs. Lions 2014 game preview: Matthew Stafford, Eli Manning set to face off in opener
Summary: Attention attention all of my sports fans this one is for you! All of my New York Fans, Where are you? All of my Detroit fans where are you? Ok! Recently the New York Giants suffered a loss from 0-6. Yes i know, 0-6 this leaving all NY fans in disappointment wishing that the next game is only a success. Although this was not the only team that was not impressed but more likely upset. The Detroit lions expectations didn't go as expectated either; dropping six of eight games both teams at 7-9 records, this being a loss, leaving fans in distress. Both teams have suffered from losses, both teams have been led to victories and now the only thing they can do is work hard and play harder but most importantly remember that team work makes the dream work, no one can do it by themselves each athlete needs one another and must be held accountable.
-I would describe the authors writing style as expository because author explain's and inform of what went down at the game and how both teams didn't reach expectations that most expected them to reach. Author talks about how team New York Giants loss from 0 to 6 leaving giants fans in disappointment and Detroit lions dropping 6 of eight games, leaving fans in fans in confusion weather to stick with their team or change teams.
-The intended audience would be any individual that has an interest in football or one that wants to develop and understanding about the game of football.
-The author uses tone would be simple, informative in acceptance because author talks about the hindrance both teams have face and where their at now. How both teams are striving to remain relevant and in control and strive to make perfections out of their failures, not letting anything hold them back.
-The author establishes story telling using the Cause and Effect method and talking to its targets audience by 3rd person author often says words like "he, she and they". The author insures that the reader understands and comprehends, what he is stating and often compares and contrast events. Often he talks about previous games and whats expected of the outlet.
-Literary devices that the author uses would by using analogy comparing and contrasting concepts. Author also uses anti thesis when author talks about Calvin Johnson being he best wide receiver and Standford being the top quarterback.
-The style is great because male by the name James Brady the author talks about athletes and their position, what their are rated as and their full potential. Author also mentions previous games that were not so much of success and could of been better.
- The nut-graf of the story would be "They certainly throw the football as much as any other team" I say this is the nut-graf because this statement is not needed because in a way its quite bias and would could cause some to disagree or agree.
- The key sources of the article would be the athletes that the author stated, Chris Johnson, Andre Willams, Rashad Jennings and plenty of more.
- Challenges that would come with this story is finding the most essential, realistic and pragmatic information so that when you write the article you have lots talk about. Another would be finding accurate data or background information of the athletes like the position they play, the games that they've done their best in, the games they have not done their best in.
-This article would be located in the sports section of the magazine, This way all the people that pursue an interest in sports can have the opportunity of reviewing the game, learn to understand the game and know how winning team was led to victory.
- The articles strengths would be that he is straight to the point, very specific about what he's talking about and last but not least he mentions multiple key sources (athletes) included in his article.
-One specific suggestion would be to see if the author can get a quote from one of the athletes to support what he is saying just to make the article more stronger, more believable and more realistic. The article is true, i believe whats stated is the truth i just think a quote in their would only make the article stronger to where it would be hard for the reader to disagree because you have proof, evidence to support whats being stated. Besides that everything else was good!
Journal #6 Mayweather Leaves No Reason For Third Fight With Maidana
Summary: Saturday was the time, The time was finally here Mayweather Vs, Maidana fight was such a sight to see. Both individuals entered the ring with " confidence yet such courageous character" From Mayweather injuring his finger and his left jab he didn't let that stop him he continued to have fearless ambition. As for Maidana he states that he won the fight because you cant win a fight by running although judges and numerous disagreed, this leaving Maidana fans disappointed but all they can do is wish him the best the next time. Being that Maidana took a loss Mayweather kept his WBC welter weight championship increasing it 47-0. Mayweather went in the ring to won and what you know our world's greatest Floyd Mayweather one.
- I would describe the author writing style is very informative and explanatory. Author uses plenty of adjectives and uses great diction throughout the article.
-The intended audience would be anyone that pursues an interest in boxing, or wants to develop a clear understanding of the game boxing.
- The authors uses tone by writing in a very intelligent and strong manner. He uses multiple adjectives and strives to make a connection with the reader.
-The author establishes story telling or tell the story in a way that is instructive and teaching the reader something, The author also states previous information a bout Mayweather and Maidiana fight on May 5th , how Mayweather took a loss for the 1st fight but went in the ring with an ambitious attitude, mindset on Sept, 13th . Striving hard to succeed.
-Literary devices that author uses is analogy, author often compares concepts and ideas as well as aphorisms when authors explains how Mayweather attempted to put Maidaina in line like a recess teacher putting a second grader in line.
- No style does not get in the way of reporting the story because the key purpose of this story is not trying persuade you, convince you or tell you about someone it is simply to tell the reader what occurred at the fight, the strengths and weaknesses of the fight and how it could of been better and minor problems and disagreements that occurred at the fight. For instance when Mayweather stated that maidana bit his hand, Put his hand in his mouth but Maidana says he didn't do such thing "How could I bite him? I was wearing a mouthpiece. I'm not a dog,". Mean while Maidiana may have been disappointed in disagreement with the fight, May weather took home the belt ending the night of in victory. Injuries came in the way but he jumped in the ring to win and he left out a winner.
-Their is not nut-graf in the story, Author states plenty of useful facts and statements.
-Challenges that i would face and most likely the author would face would be accumulating all accurate data and getting numerous of key sources to include in your article and to support what your stating.
-This article would be located in the entertainment section because the purpose of this article is to inform and to entertain .
-The articles strengths would be that it includes a lot of key sources and author insures to leave out their personal opinion, the author says enough and not too much. The structure was appropriate for the article it was very well written and the story was very well told.
- A suggestion i would say is for the author would to be more entertaining and ask more questions just to keep the readers undivided attention. I think this would of really made the article, to where it wasn't as boring but more informative and entertaining. I think if you balance the two you cant go wrong.
Journal #7 Effects of Music on Society
Summary- When you had no one to turn to, No one was their for you but who? Please tell me who? Yes music was their music is always their and I believe this is why so many be rely on music, music is powerful it can have an effect on any individual. Music has feeling its what people can relate to but not only that it gets the job done its great with productivity, it keeps the mind motivated. Not only that music helps our children within development it helps their comprehension It prevents those from failure. The music doesn't judge the individual but believes in the individual because although music doesn't have a voice it impacts one to where they can develop their own perspective on things. Everyone is entitled to their own opinion some may agree that music is in fact a useful tool and some may disagree stating that music can be communicated in violent ways but from reading from the article I accumulated that music is a tool and each individual is allowed to use it in the way that they propose as long as music is treated with respect and helps be productive in our everyday lives it can only remain useful and beneficial.
-I would describe the author's style as persuasive because the author describes how music is important how it can be useful in multiple ways . How music speeds up productivity or it can reduce stress for the listener.
-The intended audience would be any one that has passion, strong desire for music and wants to know the Impact music has on our society.
-The author uses tone by being using words of great diction, author uses plenty of adjectives to describe how a person may be positively or negatively impacted by music.
-The author establishes story telling by describing the Importance of music, how some people would say music is their everything because music is within them. Music is them. Music plays such a big part in their everyday lives it can affect how one thinks, acts and does.
- Literary devices that the author uses in the article is amplification author is very descriptive and includes plenty of facts and information.
- No the style doesn't get in the way of the article I think the style is great because the author is simply describing how music is essential, why people listen to it and the effect it has on numerous of people so I think the author persuading the reader to believe in the importance of music using the cause and effect and method is very well done and is very well said.
-Their is no nut-graf in the story the author continuously states numerous of facts and statements.
- Although their are multiple key sources in the story that are creditable I would say the ("Psychology of Music") would be the key source because it states that “children, teens, and even babies potentially benefit from listening to music, as music can be a stimulant to intellectual and cognitive development” It states how us teens and children are impacted by music within society, how it can play a part in our development as we become adults.
-A challenge that would be for me and with reporting this article would be accumulated key sources, accurate information and data and trying to understand the reader that disagrees with you because this a persuasive essay.Although you may believe In one thing you still have to Insure that you understand your opposing position.
- This article would be located in the entertainment section because although we use music to inform and communicate with us, music is still used to have fun and to entertain.
-The articles strengths would be its great use of amplification because plenty of information, plenty of sources only convinces the reader to believe what you believe. It convinces that what you believe is pragmatic, realistic and believable.
-Theirs not many suggestions I would give this article because like I said previously I think the article is very well said and written but a suggestion I would say is to entertain a little bit more. Ask questions, Include the reader in the discussion. Enjoy what your talking about but besides that everything else was great. Great job, Well done!
Journal #8 Wanting To Belong, The Effect Of Not Belonging.
Summary- Within society, within today's generation one wants to be the "It Factor" One wants to feel as if they belong. One wants to feel like matter, someone cares about them that they are important too. No one wants to be alone and feel like they have no one to turn too. Throughout the article the author explains the importance of belonging. How when you belong you are more likely to be more self confident, strong minded and you remain motivated. An the effect of not belonging how you feel as if you don't matter, your not wanted. An feeling this way can cause you to be less confident and are not as persistent. This is why it is always essential to remain true to yourself, honest with yourself and try your best to be involved. Surround yourself with people that think the way you think. That want themselves to succeed and want you to succeed. surround yourself with people that have the same similar dreams and aspirations as you.
-I would describe the authors writing style as Persuasive because author explains how as humans we feel the need to belong and surround our self with people that have the same aspirations.
-The intended audience would be people, any individual that has an interest in knowing how us people feel the need to belong and ourselves with people with the same interest.
-The author uses tone by the words the author uses to describe how difference between loneliness and belonging. Author says when an individual when an individual feels like they belong they feel more confident they feel like they are apart of something. One feels like their a piece that completes the puzzle but when an individual is lonllie often the individual will be less confident in themselves and become anti social.
-The author establishes story telling by using the cause and effect method and often refers to key sources in third person. The author a woman by the name of Amanda Enayati discusses a topic that almost any individual can relate to, she simply describes the effect of not belonging and how they can affect an individual from being successful -Literary devices that the author uses would be alteration and repetition , author often uses words that have same sound and repeats words that have been stated previously.
-No the style does not get in the way of the story because the authors topic is about the effect of not belonging and the effect it can have on an individual .
-Their is no nut-graf in the story author has numerous sources and plenty of facts to support whats being stated.
-The most key source in the article or should i say the most primary source would be the male or female by the name of Walton that states the importance of belonging. How he has created an intervention, a stress free environment for one that may be going through a difficult time .
-This article would located in the variety section in our magazine or a place where people read up on for advice. When their going through a difficult time.
-I know i say this in every article but it is true. The most challenging part for me and with reporting this article would be finding your key sources because that's what makes your article. Yes people pay attention to the what the author states but reader pays attention more to the sources the proof, the evidence to support what your saying.
-The article strengths would be its use of amplification. The author is in-dept when talking about how it is important to belong and the effect it has on one when an individual feels like they do not belong. The author also includes multiple key sources.
- If i could give a suggestion i would; but i think this article is well said, well written. It ask questions, informs and explains.
Journal #9 The Plus Side ( LongForm Article)
Summary: If you love clothes, fashion and apparel this article is for you. If you persue an interest in the fashion industry and want to know more about it and its devlopment this ,article is for you and last but not least if your a little bit on the thicker side and still want to look cute and make your outfit do what it do this article is for you. All my thick girls i know its sometimes hard to find the outfit that best fit for you but this is why im here to help you. A woman by the name of Gwen Doe created full fashion week in NYC and i know all of you are saying full figured fashion week, yeah I've seen that before that is just going to consist of basic clothes, simple clothes clothes that are conservative to hide whats underneath and that's not me. Well that's where your wrong full figured fashion week has changed. Their has been evolution people even department stores like Macy's , H&M, Forever 21 are spicing up their plus size clothing line so just know theirs nothing to worry about. For my plus size girls always remember its not what they tell you to wear, its about you want to wear and what you feel most confident in. Don't pay attention to the people that try to stereotype you and tell you that you shouldn't wear this, you shouldn't wear that. Wear what you want and be beautiful!
- I would describe the authors style as expository because the author goes in dept about the plus size girls and their side of fashion. Author goes into great detail by informing reader that thick girls come all shapes and sizes and explains how " Full figured fashion gets a new look"
- The target audience would be anyone that has an interest in fashion particularly girls or young woman. This being because author mainly talks about girls being a size 14 and above. So mainly plus size woman and woman of average size.
-The author uses tone by being very specific, when it comes to diction. Author is sometimes to specific and broad when it comes to describing Fashion Week and what occurred.
-The author establishes story telling by talking in 1st person and stating events in sequence because author often states personal experience and what they have seen within the thick girl fashion industry. Author states that apparel with the plus size girl fashion industry colors are often kept simple, looks are kept Conservative and things are pretty much tradition. Author then compares and contrast now from back then and how now stores are spicing up their plus size clothing industry, their giving it new flavor .
-Literary devices the author uses amplification because of its numerous of key sources and analogy because author often juxtapose the fashion industry by explaining the fashion industry evolution from back then to now. Aswell as archetype by stating how plus size girls are often stereotyped for simple clothing, more loose fitting.
- I don't think style gets in the way of the writing but i do think that if it was written in a different way it would of been more easy to follow. It would make it a little bit easier for the reader to comprehend. I think if the article was more broken down into sections and more simplified in a way it would of made the article a little bit better.
-I wouldn't say their is a nut-graf in the story because even though somethings that the author states is less important, I still think its important for the reader to know. For instance when the author states how "fat" girls were known for low social status and thin girls were known for their wealth". This is not the most important aspect in the article but i still think its essential to know because everyone has their own perspective about things and is entitled to their own opinion.
- The most key source in this story would be a young woman by the name of Gwen Devoe she is the creator of full figured fashion week production. Gwen is a plus size woman herself and she wanted other plus size ladies to ketch up on whats hot and whats not and this why she created full figured fashion week production, investing her own money in time into what she strongly believed in.
-Challengers that would come with reporting this article is keeping your readers attention because you want to inform your reader but you dont want amplify everything and overwhelm the reader with all the information. You want to entertain explain inform your reader by asking questions, including personal experiences and state why you believe in what you believe in.
-This article would be located in the variety section of our magazine. This being because fashion is such a big topic theirs different aspects and parts when your talking about fashion. Fashion can go from apparel, to shoes to sunglasses. You can refer to numerous things and say that it represents fashion. Fashion is topic that is more broad and less narrow.
-My articles strengths would be its good use of information, its plenty of key sources and how the author states personal experiences that they have encountered.
-One specific suggestion would be to ask more questions, entertain the reader a little bit more. Use more literary devices such as simile's and metaphors and alteration to give your writing a little bit more flavor. Besides that everything was great well done, well said and well written.
Journal #10 ADD / ADHD in Children
Summary: Children of ADD and AHD will be unable to sit still for long amount of time and are always filled with energy and drive. However because of their disorder is it fair that we treat differently? No it is not. Kids of ADD and AHD should be treated the same as us they are not different then us. Research shows that kids of ADD and AHD are most likely diagnosed with this disorder before the age of 7 and constantly have a need for attention and are unable to focus on task that they find not interesting. However kids of these disorders are special in a way that they are most likely to be very creative, entertain and have a numerous amounts of energy. Throughout the article the author discusses the signs and symptoms of kids with ADD and AHD. The positive and negative aspects of kids with these two disorders. An how their is a solution for parents that have children with ADD or AHD .
-I would describe the authors writing style is very informative and explanatory. Author chronically explains the symptoms of kids with ADD and AHD. How kids are most likely diagnosed with this disorder through early childhood. How Kids of this disorder may have a disinterest in learning, paying attention and constantly have problems in school. The author says though this is problem for numerous of kids. Their is a solution.
-The intended audience would be any adult that may have a child with a disorder of ADHD or ADD. Or a parent that wants to know the symptoms of ADD or AHD to see if their child is diagnosed with one of these disorders. But not only that it could just be a person that has an interest in disorders and wants to study these to disorders to find out more information.
-The author uses tone by being "clear, concise and courteous"(DailyWritingTips.com). Author clearly states their point and describes details in a way that is straight forward. Author respects audience by being courteous by leaving out her personal opinion by stating relevant facts and details.
-The author establishes story telling by using great use of amplification. Describes content well insuring that reader develops an understanding about kids of ADD and ADHD. Author also includes ethos convincing the reader that if they may think their child may have this disorder that its important for the parent to influence a better diet plan, let your child receive help in therapy and try to avoid all distractions in home environment. This being because you want to give you child the appropriate assistance that he or she needs. You want to strive to give them you undivided attention. Pathos is expressed through out the article as well. The author expresses emoticon by giving a solution of what parents can do if they have a child of this disorder and though children or ADD and AHD have a attention deficit they can be very creative, have a lot of energy and be entertaining. Last but not least author uses logos through out the article their is a lot of logic displayed, their is alot of relevant information and data that is said throughout the article.
-Literary devices that are expressed through out this article would be amplification like i said previously and consonance author sometime uses words and has sentences with the same sounds. Compare and Contrasting would be a device that is expressed as well as author refers back to the symptoms and positive and negative aspects of children of ADD and AHD.
-From reading the article i would say their is no nut graf that is expressed through out the article, the author constantly discusses facts and details that are relevant.Everything that is said is important for the reader to know and understand.
-Their is not any key source or an individual that is included within this article. However i think the article is so well said, well written that it doesn't really need a key source or an individual to prove its point and discuss symptoms and aspect of kids with ADD and AHD.
-Challenges that come with reporting this article and would be challenging for me would be making a connection with your reader because this is such a sensitive topic that you have to be careful what you say because this is real. This is real disorder that affects numerous of kids world wide that are affected with ADD and AHD and times it can prevent them from doing certain things and being able to fit in because at times they don't act like every one else.
-This article would be located in the variety section in our magazine. This being because their is not a section in the magazine talking about kids with these disorders or disabilities.
- The articles strengths would be including the ethos, logos and pathos. It would be its great use of amplification and explaining the content of kids with ADD and AHD in a well manner.
-As for suggestion their is not one specific suggestion that i could really say because the author really hit the jackpot. The author hits every area when it comes to describing the content, explaining the content, a solution to would you can do if your may have this disorder the behavior is which one may act. The author describes everything that needs to be said when it comes to talking about kids with ADD and AHD. Everything that needed to be said was said.
Journal #11 (1 in 5 are bullied in NYC high schools)
Summary: Bullying. Yes bullying i repeat bullying. This is unacceptable that a student feels as if they hate themselves because they recieve hate from others or dont feel like they can go to school and feel safe as if they are in a comfortable enviornment. Its ashame and im ashamed to say that their has been bullies that have bullied inoscent indivisuals to the point where they no longer believed in themselves and commited suicide. Yes suicide they killed themselves because of what other people thought and what bullies accused them of. People we have to put a stop this today this can no longer continue, will no longer continue. Its up for us to take stand and make a change to decrease the rate of students being bullied in schools nationwide. No student should ever have to be in position where they feel they must harm their self and blaim theirself for something that is not their fault. Each individual, human being should be allowed to be their self without being judged. Its not right that students that like the same sex get picked on more then students that are straight, its unfair and its not in any body's place to judge one because of their gender preference. Each and every individual should be able to go to school, study hard learn their lesson and school and be happy and believe with them selves. Their will be a change made. Today their will be a change made.
-I would describe the authors style of writing as very informative. The author purpose in this article is to make you aware of the circumstance. The circumstance meaning that transgender students, students that like the same sex are more likely to get bullied then students that are straight that like the opposite sex.
-The author establishes story telling by using words of great diction. Author Carl Campanile tells the story in a great manner being that this topic is a very sensitive topic and if it is not said correct it could effect many people. He insures to leave out his personal opinion and states general facts and doesn't rely on theoretical considerations.
-The intended audience would be any victims of bullying or anybody that wants to know whats the rate of being bullied. The numerical value, the percentage of young students in high school that are being bullied constantly everyday. Anyone that wants to know the logic behind bullying and why kids most likely get bullied, this article is for them.
-Literary devices that the author uses would be amplification. Author goes into great details about the meaning of bullying and the effect it could have on students. The author also has great use of analogy because the author compares students that like the same sex and that are straight. How students that like the same sex are more likely be bullied then students that like the opposite sex.
-The style was good it was organized. The article answered most questions and concerns that the reader may have. The author described the content of bullying by using the cause and effect method, The author tells the reader what happen and the overall result because the situation happened.
-From reading this article i have come to conclude that their is no nut-graf expressed within this article because everything that is said , needed to be said. Everything that Carl Campanile states about bullying is essential for the reader to know because he uses real life examples to support what he is saying. He talks about how students being bullied has caused students to commit suicide, how something more needs to be done then whats already being done. He talks about how bullying is unacceptable and will not be allowed within our NYC schools but all schools nation wide.
-The key source of this article would be Mayor-elect Bill de Blasio he said "that cracking down on bullying is a priority. He issued a report on the issue last year as the city’s public advocate, stressing that bullying should first be addressed through mediation rather than resorting to suspensions." Mayor elect is saying bullying needs to be put to a stop. Now, today this second we need to take a stand and do something about this issue weather its increasing the consequence's for bullies or taking first imediate mediation to stop kids from bullying other students because this will not be tollerated. Buillies fail to realize that when their harassing their victim's that their costing inicent students their life when they have done nothing wrong.
- Challenges that would come with reporting this article and that would be challenging for me would be knowing how much to say and what not say because with this particular subject as for other subjects aswell you have to becareful what you say. Being that your using real life examples, your talking about real life situations. So i think you just have to speak to your reader in a very formal and appropriate manner and insure that you leave out your personal opinion and be honest, have sympathy and be very respectful.
-This article would be located in the variety section of a magazine being that bullying is such a broad topic because their is different aspects of it. Their is cyberbullying. Bullying online through the internet and social media sources and then their is bullying that is face to face through confronatations and teasing or picking on an indivisual.
-The artcie strengeths would be that author uses ampmlification although he is straight to the point. He tells what he needs you to know and insures that you have a clear understanding of what he is talking about. He does this by going into great detal and comparing contrasting the rates of being bullied and bullying in NYC compared to other countries. The stucture is good, the author discusses topic throughly and everything is well said and well written.
-Is their one specfic suggestion that i would have for this article no being that this article was well done. It was written and said like i mentioned previously and this is a piece that i could see coming back to in the next 5 yrs because this topic will always be relevant. Their is always going to be disputes that happen with students or two indivisuals not liking each other. However i do hope that in the next years bullying rates will decrease, their will be less students getting bullied and commiting suicide.
Journal #12 (What Will The Fashion World Do With Kim Kardashian)
Summary: Kim kardashian. Yes Kim Kardashian. The one that got married in 72 days the one that is no longer with basketball player Kris Humphries and is now with rapper by the name of Kanye West and last but not least the one that is most famous for her hit making reality show with her sisters,Keeping Up With The Kardashain's. Throughout the article the author talks about Kim Kardashian being an icon how people only look up to her because of what she has an what her family has. Then the author brings up a good point about Why does Kim Kardashian do what she is does, Is she only working and maintaining twitter followers etc.. for the money or because that's really something she wants to do. So throughout the article the Benjamin Wallace informs you with information, tells you what he thinks and prefers and then lets you sit back and formulate your opinion.
-I would describe the authors writing style, Benjamin Wallace form of writing style as very corny, funny and in a way serious. Through out the article he constantly compares and compares and try's to make small little jokes to grasp the readers attention. One minute he is serious next minute he is joking so i would say his style is in between being humorous and serious.
-The intended audience would be anyone that has an interest in Kim Kardashian or that's into the fashion industry.
-The author's tone in the article is very opinionated, the author compares kim kardashan to a zoo animal. How the only reason people like her is because of what she has done and the materialistic things she has, He often states that the only reason Kim Kardashian is so popular today is because of her sex tape and her father's practice in law defending a case of OJ.
-The author tells the story from his point of view. The author states connotation and denotation through the article he tells the reader facts about Kim Kardashian and then gives you his opinion about what he thinks. Author Benjamin Wallace is not afraid to state his opinion at all throughout his piece, He insures that his opinion is stated and has facts to support his opinion.
-Literary device that Mr.Wallace uses through out his piece is amplification by stating information about who Kim Kardashian and her journey to becoming a major icon and about her no family and relatives. He also uses analogy throughout his artcle by constantly comparing kim kardashian to a zoo animal.
-The style is good throughout the article, i have to say it could be better just so the article has more of a flow and doesnt feel like the reader is confused throughout the article because constantly changing from topic.
-Theirs is multiple key sources throughout the article but i have to say the most key source, the important source would be Ethan Zukerman and a male by the name Mit Professor because these two indivisuals seems to know a little more about Kim Kardashian then the public knows. Im pretty sure that public and most people werent aware that Kim Kardashian makes some her daily income just from media attention rated by Google searches. So i would say these to gentlemens would be the key sources because they state overture, background information and support their ideas with facts and opinions.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this article, that would be challenging for me would be the cause of conflict and a debate. This being because this is such a highly opinionated piece. Your going to have a lot of people disagree with you and really be against what your saying. Especially since the author didn't address the opposing position the reader that may not agree that kim kardashian is a zoo animal and is really big fan of hers. So being that the author didn't do that, they might face a lot of judgement with their article.
-This article would be located in the entertainment section or the variety section, this being because when you think of Kim Kardashian what do you think of it? You think of entertainment, you think of icon. You think of expensive clothes and materialistic things so that why most likely this article would be located in the entertainment section and if not in the entertainment section, most likely the variety section.
-The article strengths is that its states general information and facts, gets into specific details. The author shared his opinion and shared it well. The author Benjamin Wallace had quite a sense of humor through out the piece, going back and forth about the zoo Kim Kardashian is like a zoo animal etc...
-One specific suggestion i would say for this article is yes i understand that you are writing a opinionated piece so you feel, you are entitled to say what you want to say but i think its all about how you say what you say. Throughout the article i also noticed some explicit words such as the F word mentioned. An i think cursing in your piece of writing weather its once or twice its unacceptable because your not only offending the person your talking about but the reader may also take offense to what their reading. My theory is that when writing an opinionated article your opinion is to be stated but in a respectful manner.
Jounal #13 Iggy Azalea Leads American Music Awards Nominations/(The American Music Awards Logo)
Summary- Okay it is a Sunday night and your at home. What do you watch? Most likely the Grammy Awards or even The American Music Awards. Which ever one you prefer. An i say prefer because their has been constant debate about which awards is to be better because author states that The AMA awards is better because its open world wide, nation wide for anybody to vote and nominate the artist of their chose. Where as for the Grammy Awards the public does not have the option to nominate their artist of choose. The artist get nominated more for how popular they are. I cant say i disagree with the author he may have a point there because their to being nominated for how much people like you, You should want to receive your award more for you hard work, time that you invested in yourself so that you can become the best artist you can be. Last but not least the mentions Iggy Azaela how she is the hot new artist of 2014 and left the public, media stunned with taking lead in american music award nominations. In conclusion this article was a great article from Azaela being nominated and the differences between the two award shows. The author proved its main point, that if you work hard you should be acknowledged for your hard work and this why the American Choice Awards would be great place for an artist to be nominated from.
-I would describe the authors story telling as very informative and descriptive. The author really goes in to great detail about the music industry behind the scenes and the distinguish between the AMA (American Music Awards) and the Grammy awards.
-The intended audience would be any one that is a fan of Iggy Azaela or that watches the Grammy awards or the American music awards.
-The author uses tone in a appropriate manner, The author clearly talks about Iggy Azaela appearance in which she arrived to AMA awards on a white horse and talks about the difference between the AMA awards and the Grammy's saying that AMA is most likely better and is more popular because anybody can vote, The public, it doesn't matter who your are you can vote and being that this is a feature the Grammy's doesn't offer is why the AMA is consider to be more popular.
-The author establishes story telling in the cause in effect method. I would say the author uses a lot of amplification, goes into clear detail and really talks about the behind the scenes part of the music industry and how the awards and the Grammy awards works. How its is more essential for artist to be nominated for their hard work and dedication rather then fans would consider their favorite, because its all about consistency and progress that artist made from when they first started.
-Literary devices that author uses would be ethos, convincing the reader to agree that American Music Awards is better then the Grammy Awards. The author often juxtapose back in forth between the Grammy and AMA awards. As well as amplification great use of details facts and information to support personal opinion.
-The style is good for the story, mainly throughout the article. The author stays on topic and just continues to add on additional relevant data. The more you start to be convinced the the AMA is better. You start to develop your own personal opinion.
-I have to say for this particular article their is not a nut-graf or a piece of information that is less relevant or important then the other. Everything that is said, is needed to be said. The author discusses how one can vote for the AMA and The Grammys and the procedures on how voting for an artist goes about.
-For this article their no one that was stated that gave their personal opinion or added their personal input in the article. The author mostly tells the story from his personal experience and of which he or she thinks about the AMA and Grammy Awards.
-Challenges that come with reporting this article and that would be challenging for me is knowing how much to say and knowing not what to say because you wan to give you opinion but you do not want to overwhelm your audience with what you think and believe. So i think if you say how you feel in a respectful and appropriate manner and consider your opposing position then that makes the piece, your piece is well written.
-This article would be located in the variety or the entertainment section because this article is more opinion orientated, author gives their personal opinion and compares and contrast American Music Awards and the Grammy Awards and Iggy Azaela leaving the public aghast, takes lead in the american music award nominations.
-The article strengths is that opinion is stated in a appropriate manner, the author has great use of diction.
-One specific suggestion that would make this article even more fabulous is if the author addressed the opposing position because then the reader could understand that the author sees the other side, that their is another side to be understood. That would really make this article stronger and also if the author asked more question to entertain and keep readers undivided attention that would good. Besides that the article was great.
Journal #14 The Down And Dirty History Of TMZ (Long Form Article)
Summary: TMZ scams and persuading people to people to believe everything but the truth. Yeah that is TMZ for you. TMZ has been secretly telling its people that take a TMZ tour to see all of the celebrity hot spots false information. They said R&B celebrity Chris brown made most of his hits on Good Morning America they said James Franco is on Broadway and that happens to be false as well. TMZ history and what their known for not many people are aware of an i think its time that those unaware pay attention. The only reason why TMZ makes up such false information like this is to start gossip. TMZ being successful in situations like this with the public believing and standing behind what they say has earned them a multi million dollar enterprise, to be exact $55 million dollars. In conclusion we have to start paying attention to what we believe in and feed into and just remember everything someone tells you and what you read on blog sites is not the truth because TMZ chooses what to tell you and what they tell you is not the full truth.
-I would describe the author writing style as very explanatory because the author often discusses the movement of TMZ and what their job is and how they manipulate scenes and situations just for the public eyes and the different modes they have to transition to while being on scene.
-The intended audience would be anyone that pursues an interest with TMZ and Paparazzi any body that wants to know more about them and the role that they play, this would be the article to read about.
-The author establishes story telling from personal experience and kind of incorporates real life situations to prove what is to be stated. In the beginning of the article the author compared to attractions that talked about how the TMZ tour in NYC has included the public with completed their daily missions. How TMZ uses the public responce and experience from of which they've seen and believe and have created all gossip website and using what the public;'s reaction as entertainment and created a "55 million dollar enterprise"
- The authors uses tone by using good vocabulary. He explains the story in a way to make you want to keep on reading. The author is very specific about the topic that is being talked about.
-Literary device that the author uses is analogy by comparing attractions and different situations that have happened. From TMZ multi million dollar enterprise to chris brown being known for his hits on Good Morning America. With both of these attractions being false the author often discusses how TMZ manipulates people to believe in stuff that is not true so that people will appease to them . The author also goes into great detail using real situations as examples.
-The style is good for the story. The author describes story within sequence within using current events.
-From reading the article i did not observe a nut graf within this piece of writing. Everything that was stated was essential, it needed to be said. The article was straight to the point it was very direct and included wonderful relevant facts and information.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this article and that would be challenging for me would be knowing how much to say and how much not say because you want to tell the truth and be real with your reader but you do not want to say too much because some of the information and business is not for you to say. You don't want to tell someone eases business or give a clue talking about someone because that cause consistent controversy. So i think that would be a major problem for me especially when bring up the quotes in the article and real life situations.
-This article would be located in the variety section or entertainment section. Only because this topic is so broad and TMZ's history and effects can be about different things. Its not like sports where its basketball, football or baseball. TMZ can be about any one or anything.
-The articles strengths would be the author expressing realism by using included real life situation in the article. The author also uses words of good diction, amplification with its relevant facts and analogy by comparing its concepts and ideas.
-I think the article was great. Their is one specific suggestion i could give the author is honest, is real and told the story like it needed to be told. The author stayed on topic,kept he or she's focus and proved their point.
Journal #15 (Obesity Rate for Young Children Plummets 43% in a Decade)
Summary: Recently obesity within young children has declined by 43% in a decade. Research states that women breast feeding and schools and work environments providing beverages that are less sugary, has helped be a solution for this problem. he article stated that children that come from low income homes obesity rates have increased and that although or children obesity rate has decreased by 43% this is only a small percentage of society being that adults and youth are not included . In conclusion children obesity rates have decreased. Its still up to us as a nation to continue to have the obesity rates decrease. Its up for us as a whole to remain consistent and continue to strive hard to succeed so that we can see progression. In the future we hope for rates to increase but not just within children but within our adult and youth community as well.
- I would describe the authors writing style as very formal. The author talks to the reader In a very calm way. The author states what is the issue, what has been done and what needs to be done.
-The intended audience would be anyone that's interested in obesity rates . Anyone that wants to know more about obesity, what causes obesity and the overall affect of people with obesity.
-The author uses tone in a very appropriate manner, she insures to leave out her personal opinion. She is very respectful and informative when talking about obesity. The author also uses great diction, the vocabulary that she uses within the piece is great and very well understood.
-The author tells the story in third person. She often includes outside sources to support what she is saying. I noticed also that through out the article the author tells the story in sequence, each event leads to something. Each situation that happen is the cause for another situation.
-Literary devices the author uses is connotation and denotation she informs the reader of denotation by including outside sources. Amplification is expressed as well with all of the important and relevant facts that are stated.
- The style is good for the article. The article is told in sequence as well as cause and effect.
-I have to say their is not a less essential piece of evidence being stated. I think that every thing is stated needed to be stated. I think for this particular article their is no nut-graf because your focus is on two things informing and explaining and when you inform and explain, mostly every thing that's being stated is relevant.
-Although their are several relevant sources stated. The most key source in the story or the source the author could not do with out would be Dr. Koplan he was one that went to Emory university and studied medicine and public health. I say he is the most important because he observes the public healthy daily, that is his job to observe public health rates, and obesity rates. He seems to have experience within this field, with the public being healthy and obesity rates increasing and decreasing. He stated that the age group was only a small slice of american society meaning that its good that their is a decline with obesity but its still important to make people aware of obesity because it is still an issue, their is still another half of society that is obese. Dr. Korplan learned the concept of obesity well this is why i say he is the most important key source.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this article and that would be challenging for me would be leaving out your personal opinion, knowing what to say and not what to say because with this particular topic you have to be careful what you say because numerous people within american society are affected by obesity day by day. Obesity affects adults but not only that children so this is why i would say to be cautious when writing this article because you wouldn't want your reader to feel judged because their obese, or not like themselves.
- A suggestion i would say to the reader is a maybe change the topic focus a little bit and maybe instead talking about obesity within young children decreasing within young children, talk about obesity rates in general for adults as well so you can compare the two and see different causes and affects of obesity, how age is a big factor when it comes to obesity. How if your obese when your younger this is how the circumstances will be when you get older. Just so your reader can observe some of the similarities and differences.
Journal #16 (Why Katy Perry Could Never Dress Like Rihanna)
Summary: Everyone knows that Katy Perry and Rihanna are close of friends and when Katy Perry was younger Katy Perry look and style was similar to Rihanna's but ever wonder why know Katy Perry is more conservative and is changing up her looks. Author Michael Rothman states that Katy Perry said she wants to focus on her music, Her body is not the way it use to be. Katy Perry said a year ago that she was unbalanced and immature. Throughout the article the author often compares Katy Perry now to how she was a year ago and how her style has changed tremendously and this being good thing because change is only for the better.
-The intended audience would be anyone that is interested in entertainment and that is a fan of Katy Perry and wants to know why Katy Perry does the dress the way she use to.
-The author uses tone by talking to the reader in a very formal manner. The author also uses quotes and examples to support whats being stated.
-Literary devices that the author uses would be amplification so that reader has a clear understanding of the concept as well as analogy because the author compares concept and ideas. Often the author compares Katy Perry now to back then.
-The style does not get in the way of the story. The style was great it insures that the story keeps its focus and is fluently.
-This is article includes a lot of information and details, their is no nut-graf in this article.
-The most key source in the article would be the one and only Katy Perry because who is going to know about Katy Perry more then herself.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this article and that would be challenging for me would be the interviewing part i mean she is Katy Perry, the one and only Katy Perry i know it must be hard to get a Katy Perry for an interview. Staying focus and asking question in appropriate manner would be hard because she is a celebrity an all.
-This article would be located in the entertainment section. Only because we do not have a celebrity news section. So most likely it would be located in the entertainment section because a celebrity job is to entertain.
-The articles strength would be getting Katy Perry to give tell her story and talk about what she is focused and how she has changed. Just the fact that the author got Katy Perry to talk about herself was a big bonus for this article because mostly everything that is stated can not be denied because you heard from Katy Perry herself.
-Their is always room for improvement because nothing and no one is perfect but i would say this article was well written, well said it was simple, concise and straight to the point. Their is not a suggestion i could give this article. The article was good.
Journal #17 (4 Motivating TED Talks to Help You Bounce Back From Failure)
Summary: -The author writing has an expository style. The author insures to inform and explain so that the reader develops a clear understanding. The author establishes story telling or tells the story in a way that most can relate to because no one is perfect we have all failed at least once. The author uses the cause and effect to explain why failure is what stops most from being successful. Its essential that let failures motivate us and give us the fuel that we need to keep creating.
-The intended audience would be anyone, any human being that wants to learn from their failures and be successful.
-The author uses tone by talking to the reader in a very formal manner to where its easy for the reader to relate to. The author puts themselves in the position the reader is in so that the reader feels like yeah that is how i feel, that is the same position i am in. The author insures that the reader can make a personal connection.
-Literary devices that the author uses is amplification and by including a lot of information and including a lot of details. As well as analogy by comparing concepts and ideas.
-The style of the article is good the author tells the story in sequence. Step by step. The author also includes the cause and effect to explain the main point.
-Their are several key sources stated within the article but the most key source would be Jeremy Bloom he was a contributor to writing this article and i say he is the key source because the example that he used to motivate people to bounce back from failure was great. He said that he being an athlete himself he has seen athletes crumble and fade because of a set back. He has witnessed and seen others in the same scenario so this is why i say he would be the key source of this article.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this article and that would be challenging for me would be sharing personal experiences of failures and trying to relate and create a personal connection with the reader.
-One specific suggestion would be to entertain and ask more questions and continuously try to grasp your readers attention. Besides that everything else was great!. This is a piece that i could return to in the next five years because forever people with fail and forever people will succeed but its all about failure and the lessons that failure has taught one to make he or she stronger.
Journal #18 (Why Tupac Is Still The Most Important Generation Of All Time)
Summary: The worlds greatest, the one that will forever be important for generations of all time former rapper Tupac. Throughout the article the author clearly states the importance of Tupac. His accomplishments, him being dedicated and consistent within his craft and how he was not only a rapper, he was poet, he was actor. He did a lot and left a major impact on many people. Former rapper Tupac will forever be important not only to me but to many individuals as well and although he is not living with us today. We insure to keep his memory and spirits alive and forever shall honor respect his legacy.
-I would describe the authors writing and the author's story telling as very informative and entertaining. The author writing style would be expository because the author is informing you of the life of rapper Tupac and his accomplishments.
-The intended audience would be anybody that is a fan of Tupac or that pursues and interest in the music industry.
-The author uses tone by informing the audience and being straight to the point. Insuring to state their personal opinion. The tone is very formal and comfortable.
-Literary devices that the author uses would be a metaphor and analogy. The author often compares concepts and ideas and when the author states that Tupac said in 1995 " You got this guy Romeo from the bloods who falls for Juilet, a female from the crips and everybody in both gangs are against them... Real tragic stuff" He compares Romeo standing for one gang and the girl he loves and has a desire for representing another gang and how although they love each other they are rivalries and their relatives do not permit their love.
-The style doesnt get in the way at all i think since the author is writing a piece about tupac and his accomplishments during his lifespan, the style is perfect.
-For this particular article every thing that is said is needed to be said. Everything that rapper Tupac has accomplished is important because all of those things exemplify why Tupac is the most important rapper is our generation. All things that have been states are essential for the reader to know.
-The most key source in the article would be Rapper tupac himself because Tupac passing away at such a young age its good that LA times was able to interview him on shakespare and hear his point of view on shakespare literature being that Tupac was great with words and artistic within literary skill when he is rapping.
- Challenges that would come with reporting this article and that would be challenging for me would be addressing my opposing position because this is such an opinionated piece because its hard to disagree Tupac will forever be important in all generations but then again some may disagree that is my opinion and not everyone is going to agree and they are not entitled to. So this i would have to say would be the most challenging part when reporting this article.
-This article would be located in the variety section or entertainment section because their is no section that is stated for the importance of rappers that shows how they have impacted many people.
-This article strengths would be the author explaining how Tupac included poetry within his writing some of the essential aspects used in poetry was used in his rapping lyrics. This making his songs, the words and the content more powerful for the individual. Tupac lyrics was very enduring and influential in a positive way and the author does a great job that formally and respectively.
- If their was specific suggestion to give i would give one but i believe that everything in this article was well said and was well written, the article was straight to the point with some amplification and easy for the reader to understand. This article was great wonderful i enjoyed reading this article and i would definitely return back to this article the near future.
Journal #19 (Work It Harder Make It Better Do It Faster Makes Us Stronger)(Longform Article)
Summary: I am sure we all strive to be productive everyday. Weather were going to school or going to work we still have a job to do a job to get done. Throughout the article the author chronically talks about knowing your environment and the importance of being productive and held accountable. Author Kevin Roose talks about simple things such as your sleep schedule can effect your environment. How its important to get enough sleep to work the next day. He mentions that you are comfortable within your work station and that studies have shown that an individual that has several work stations is more likely to be productive. So people please listen and understand and comprehend make sure that when your at work or in school make sure your in environment that is comfortable with limited distractions so that you are productive, responsible and accountable.
-I would describe the authors writing style and the way that the author establishes story telling as very expository and informative because the author chronically goes in dept about an individuals day to day work schedule and what really goes into working and be accountable to get the job done.
-The intended audience would be any individual that has a job or career. Anyone that has a schedule and has to work day by day to support for their families.
-The author uses tone in a very formal manner by including the reader in the discussion the author talks to the reader in way of which they can understand and relate to.
-Literary devices that the author is amplification by being very clear and concise. The author also uses analogy when stating that an individual work space can effect ones productivity. That studies have shown that an individual is most likely to be productive when having several work stations rather then one.
-They style does not get in the way of the article because the author includes subtitles to help guide the reader in the article so the reader doesn't get confused. Each subtitle is like a small introduction about what is going to be stated.
- The nut graf of the story would be "Maybe I’ve gotten spoiled by working from home, but I found the open office basically uninhabitable. Co-workers on phone calls. The metallic “ch-chunk” of the vending machine dispensing snacks. The patter of feet headed to and from meetings. It might be that working from home has turned me into a hermit, but I’ve never gotten less done." I think its good that the author gave his personal opinion but i do not think that it was necessary to include within the article because then the article kind of looses its main focus and goes off topic.
-The most key source of this article would be psychologist Matthew Davis because he has viewed more then 100 studies on office plans and he has found out that offices that are more busy are likely to be a distraction for one so the individual is to be less productive.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this article and that would be challenging for me when reporting this article would be discussing the differences between office plans and how they can be beneficial for one and non beneficial as well because really not one is right or wrong i think it all depends on the individual themselves and their personal work ethic.
-This article would be located in the variety section most likely because this topic is very broad. Its not like Music where everything is discussed under one topic.This article "Work It Harder Make It Better Do It Faster Make Us Stronger' is something that people can relate to whether you have a career, job or if your in school. The author makes it clear that its important to be accountable and productive at all times.
-The article strengths would be that the author insures to keep the readers attention by giving plenty of details and having great uses of amplification. An having plenty of key sources to prove what's being stated. Author Kevin Roose also included his personal experience and that is good because it shows the reader that you can relate as well when author Kevin Roose talks about how he use to work in a Manhattan office with plenty of co workers and employee's it was more hard to be consistently productive and stay of task. An how he has tried waking up early and getting ready as if he is going to work but he found out that working from home and working on his own time is better for him.
-One specific suggestion would be to include more question so the reader feels more engaged as if they are involved in the discussion. Another thing that would be good is if the author included maybe verbal irony to make the article a little bit more fun and entertaining. Besides every thing was well said and well written.
Journal # 20 (A Birth Story) (Long Form Article)
Summary: Mothers, ladies and females this article is for you. Young girls you can read this article too!. Through out the article Michelle O' Conellel tells her story and the experience she had when she was pregnant. She discusses the symptoms she had and the procedures she had to take to keep herself healthy and the baby safe as well. In the article she talks about how she had several pains before delivering the baby and how at times she would have to go to uncomfortable doctors appointments that she disliked completely. Connell talked about when going to the hospital announcing that your about to have a baby. How it is not your own moment .Everyone is having their own moment and needs the doctors undivided attention as well. Michelle O' Connell chronically talks about the process of being pregnant, the symptoms that occur and that being pregnant is a blessing and is full of happiness but at times it could be the most uncomfortable situation to be in.
-The authors writing style and the way of which the author establishes story telling would be in the narrative form because the author tells her birth story, Megan O' Connell explains her personal experience of which she had to go through to have her unborn child.
-The intended audience would be to all the mothers out their. All the females that would like to know the symptoms and the overall experience with pregnancy. Anyone that want to know about Megan O' Connell personal encounter with her birth story.
-The author writes in a very formal tone by keeping the reader superstitious and kind of excited about what is going to happen next. I noticed as i was reader i kept wanting to know more then what, what is going to happen next. Is she now going to have the baby after going through several hours of labor with cramps and pains.
-Literary devices that Connell uses is analogy she often compares concepts and ideas. She is very descriptive through the article, she discusses the symptoms she had, what she has learned and heard of what she should do if she thinks she in labor. She talks about that studies have shown when in labor you can do the belly dance and rub your belly in 45 degree clock wise motion or even do the twerking dance.
- The nut-graf of the story would be "I didn't feel like working that day, or going to another one of my doctor’s appointments at the hospital, a 40-minute commute away. The appointments are for overdue women. You sit in a room full of hospital-style armchairs (comfy but upholstered in cornflower blue, and with the kind of material you could wipe down with a washcloth) and you pull up your shirt to reveal your belly, while the nurse lubes you up and straps monitors to you and you sit with the other women whose bodies have not kicked into gear, and a chorus of fetal heart tones sing out in the room like horses galloping." I say this because the article would do better without this paragraph. It would be more stronger, on topic and would persue its main focus because i mean honestly people or should i say the reader would rather know about what you did not what you did not feel like doing.
-The key source of this article would be the author Michelle O' Connelle because who can tell Michelle O'Connelle story better then Michelle O'Connelle it happened to her.
-Challenges that would come reporting this article and that would be challenging for me would be knowing how much to say and knowing how much not to say because you know your birth story that is personal, you want to tell the truth and be completely honest but then you do not want to tell the world everything somethings you just what to keep certain things to yourself. I believe that would be the most challenging or difficult part when it comes to writing this article.
-This article would be located in the variety section of our school magazine because we are in high school most of us are not mothers or fathers yet. Were still normal young students thinking about college or the math test we have next week!
-The article strengths would be that the author informs, explains and entertains. The author tells you her story well. In a very formal and descriptive manner.
- One specific suggestion would be to ask more question like i know, i understand and comprehend that this your story but i think it is best to involve the reader in the discussion ask the reader what would he or she do if they were in your situation. I would ask the reader maybe if their was any advice they had, if you were to be in a similar situation like this again.
Journal #21 (Who Will Survive When Migos Meets Big Data? (LongForm Article)
Summary: Versace, versace Versace... an im pretty sure you guys could sing the rest of the song if i asked you to. Okay so im sure you have hear Rap group migos on the radio or maybe have even seen them on award shows like bet and vmas etc.. Well anyways through out the article the author discusses the behind the scenes of rap group migos and how they become as succesful as they are today. The author talks about a young group that is from north gwinnett georgia that was barely known about 2 to 4 years ago is now known on the radio, for its major hits and is getting paid $40,000 per show. The article chronically explains the success of rap group migos and explifies the facts that come within migos meeting big data, what they are striving for and their plans for the future.
-The author writing style and the way that the author establishes story telling would be expository because author Leon NeyFakh chronically informs and explains. The author talks about the come up of migos, and incidents rapper group migos have been through.
-The target audience would be anyone that persues an intrest in the music industry, Anybody that whats to know more about migos the rapper group. More specifically teenagers, young adults.
-The authors tone is formal and inspirtational. The author uses great use of diction and good use of imagery, when desribing scenarios and situations. Verbal irony and similies are expressed alot through out the article, for example: "The smoke sort of just nestles there and curls slowly into the air, like steam wafting off a puddle" This quote is a simile explaining the use of narcotics and the effect it has a positive and negetive effect on their music.
-Yes the author does use literary devices that are clear. The author uses similes by comparing two scenearions, the author uses amplification by going indept about rapper group migos. Author Leon NeyFakh mentions that Rapper group migos is intially from gwinnett county in North Georgia and the process of how migos group became successful. NeyFakh also uses analogy by comparing concepts and ideas and at times verbal irony.
-No i dont think the style gets in the way of the article. The article is written in sequence using the cause in effect method. I noticed that throughout the article the author uses situations that Rap group migos have been found in and then talks about who they actually are and more about their personality's . I think at times the style can be confusing but i dont think the style gets in the way of the artice being well told.
- From reading this article i can honestly say their is no Nut -graf or specific piece of information that should not be involved in the article. I think everything that is said is needed to be said and was said. Only thing that the article could do without would be for example ' Gucci has battled drug addiction and been repeatedly incarcerated throughout his career, and in March of 2013, He was arrested again, for hitting a fan with a champagne bottle—an incident that, together with a separate weapons charge, would ultimately lead to the three-year prison sentence he's currently serving " I say this particular quote not because this quote is not relevant because its is because rapper gucci mane offered migos a deal but migos denied it, I say it should be not included because this article main topic should be about the rap group migos not about other rappers and personal conflicts and situations their going through becuase that does not have any thing to do witht he article. I think its good that mentioned rapper Gucci Mane i just think the article would be better if the author didnt goes as indebt about his situation.
-The Key Source of the article would be migos the group commenting and giving their opinions about what they thought. Rap group migos stated We turned down every label. We turned down Def Jam, RCA, Atlantic," he says. "I wanted five million dollars, but didn't none of them wanna come with five million. They'd come with one, two, two-point-five. But we already came in the game with that. When Migos came out, Migos had real Rolexes on. Migos had real Versace on. The 'Versace' video cost us $100,000, you feel what I'm saying? We already came in the game with money." Refering that record labels would never sign them for the price that they wanted so they kept pushing foward until a record label would give them the price they wanted and so thats what they did.
-Challenges that come with reporting this article would be getting accurate quotes to include within the article. I think its always important that you insure that your quotes are always what was actually stated because you dont ever want to get what some one stated wrong, it should be exactly what they stated. Another thing that would be hard when it comes to reporting this article would be staying on topic keeping focus becuase yes your talking about rap group migos but their so many things to know. Their is so many things that you can talk about. For insitance you could talk about their lifestyle before they were famous, you could focus on their life now are you could even talk about their plans for the future. I think staying on topic and make sure all your information is reported in a formal way would be difficult when writing this article.
-This article would located in the variety section in the school magazine only becuase we dont have a entertainment section where they discuss groups and their plan for success.
-The article strengths would be that the author goes indept alot and the author includes alot of relevant facts and information. The author does a great job with informing entertaining and explaining.
-I think the article was great, well said and well told. I cant think of one specific suggestion that the author could include to make it better. The article was very well done. very well said and included everything that needed to be included.
Journal#22 (Speaking Up Every F****** Time) (Long Form Article)
Summary: We have all been a situation where we have been disrespected or treated the way we felt we should not be treated. We have all been in a situation where people often criticized or judged in some way, shape or form. Through article author Elizabeth Spiers talks about speaking up for yourself when others do npt believe in you and really standing up for you believe in and what is right. Spiers also mentions scenarios where other writers and contributors have been disrespected and treated unfairly. Elizabeth Spiers chronically goes in debt about standing up for yourself when people do not believe you how it is essential to continue to remain ambitious and work hard through at all because your stronger then you think you are.-I would describe the authors writing style in the way of which the author establishes story telling as very informative and expository because the author chroniclally goes in debt about speaking up for yourself and standing up for what you believe in.
-The intended audience would be the public, it would be any indivisual that wants to learn how to speak for them selves, have the self confidence and self assurance to stand up for what they believe in.
-The author uses tone is very comforable it is not informal because it does inform you of your relevant facts and details, although i think that when cursing in your artice and using explicit language, your reader is less likely to take you as seriously. So im not going to say that teh tone is informal im just going to say that it needs some work and excluding the explicit language would make the article more formal, to where people take the article more seriously.
-Liteary devices that the author uses would be like most articles amplification, by going in debt with facts and supporting details aswell as analogy by comparing concepts and ideas.
-I have to say throughout the article the style does get confusing at first the artice begins about the author personal ecounter with shanley kane and their dispute stating that the author was harrasing shane kane and then the author dissucses people judge and critizing her writings and work ethics and the author talks about other writers and contributors and the disputes they have. I was often confused when reading this article so yes i think the style and the organization of the article needs some work and improvement.
-The nut-graf of the story would be "Sometimes it was impossible to even trace what the FUCK YOUs were in response to. Would-be allies were shot down for not behaving appropriately, whether their behavior was a function of willful ignorance, or naïveté, or something undecipherable" I say this because the tone, the language and the explicit contenet i think when writing an article your tone does not have to be informal for you to get your point across. You can clearly state your point by being well mannered. The author could of said the behavior was inappropriate and unaccepatble and should have not been allowed. I think cursing and saying it was ignorance i think that is pushing it to far and when you get to that point, you kind loose respect from your reader. That your reader wont look at the article the same and silently think to themselves is really something i want to read and be a part of!
-The key source in the article would be the author of course Elizabeth Spiers because she discusses real situations that she has been through or what she has encountoured form author writers and contributors.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this article, thats common with other articles is knowing what to say what not to say becuase when you talk about other people and what they went through you have be careful that everything your saying that said is what they said and everything that happen is what happen becuase you never would want another person turning agaainst you saying i never said that or that never accured and you also dont want people to feel like if they share something with you the whole world is going to know about it. So yes i think that would be a challenging part for me when writing this article and most articles.
-This article would be located in the variety section of our school magazine only because we dont have a section that discusses personal ecounters and speaking up for yourself in uncomfortable situations.
-The articles strengths would be that it is very informative and goes into great detail about different details and scenarios.
-One specfic suggestion would be to improve the organization and the style of the article i think once you improve this and you article has fluency and flows everything else will come together because it is a minor adjustment.
Journal #23 (Why It Is Impossible To Indict A Cop) ( Long Form Article)
Summary: Did you know that in today's decade and the nearly past decade their has been several homicides and murders committed in the United States? Through out the article author by the name of Chase Madder discusses police shootings in America and how as a country we began to downfall because day to day innocent people are being killed and law enforcement is yet to be considered responsible and accountable for their actions. Madder discusses different situations and scenarios that police officers have encountered that have led to chronic homicides. The author continuously proves main idea of "Why It Is Impossible To Indict A Cop".
-I would describe the authors writing style in the way of which the author establishes story telling as very informative and expository as well as opinionated. I say this article is informative because the author constantly goes into detail about the police system, how the system operates and how cops have the advantage to commit homicide against an individual if they are in some way committing a felony, putting someone else's life in danger or if one refuses to listens to command when being arrested. This article is opinionated because some others my disagree some may think it is possible to indict a cop under all the right circumstances.
-The intended audience would the public or anyone that has an interest in the police system and wants to know about police daily operations and the factors that explain why it is hard to indict a cop under certain circumstances.
-The author tone is very formal, the author keeps focus by stating fact after fact with supporting details. The author mentions that homicide's increased within law enforcement in the last decade, that their has been 461 justifiable homicides and the numbers only continue to increase. The author also brings up police shootings in America and describes different scenarios and situations that have been unjustifiable.
-Literary devices that are clear would be analogy by comparing concepts and ideas by bringing up different scenarios and situations it helps the reader see what is the same and what is different, it helps the reader began to understand why the past repeats its self because nothing the behavior within law enforcement has not changed so homicides continue to grow rapidly and with an approximate of 310 millions of people possessing guns in the united states, this only makes the problem worse . The author also uses amplification and connotation when discussing real life situations and scenarios for example with a young man by the name of James Crawford. The police officer that shot Crawford the jury failed to indict him.
- The style does not get in the way of the article being thoroughly reported because all the situations and examples go back to the main topic of why police officers are not to be inducted and to be held accountable for their actions.
-The nut-Graf of the story I cant say that their is one because I think that everything that was stated needed to be stated because it is important and very essential. The author mentions real situations real things that happen to innocent individuals on a day to day base.
- The key source of this article would be the rights of the U.S supreme court because the supreme court rights for law enforcement is police officer protocol. Police officers must obey at all times the supreme court and take advantage of the rights of being a police officer, knowing how to handle themselves in a appropriate manner even in difficult situations. I think the U.S supreme court stating their rights and authority is very important. The U.S supreme support is the key source.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this article and that would be challenging be comparing different scenarios to one another because although they are the same they are also different in their own way as well. So yes I think this would be challenging wing how to have a balance when talking about different scenarios and relating that to why it is impossible to indict a cop.
- This article would be located in the variety section in our school magazine or the section of the main currents.
-The article strengths would be that the article is very detailed, Several facts are stated and several examples continuously prove the main idea of why it is impossible to induct cops.
-One specific suggestion would be to state more of your opinion about the examples that you have stated tell your reader why you disagreed with the James Crawford case and what you think the jury or the judge could of done better to your defense. I think giving your opinion more in this article would of made the article have more fluency and let the reader develop a understanding to both sides of the situations.
Journal #24 (How Not To Get Away With Murder) (Long Form Article)
Summary: The homicide of Nancy Howard was a sad and rude awakening for me and im sure many others. Nancy Howard was killed and assaulted for no understandable reason. Author Michael Mooney discusses Howard's life story and how she was trailered before she died, robbed for her purse and threatened by a 20 year old man with a gun. Then Michael Mooney talks about her husband and her two kids jade and Brianna and how Nancy believed that Richard Railey tried to break up their marriage because he offered her husband his jet to so that he would be able to travel back and fourth. This meaning he would be spending less time with her and more time with Suzanne a dental hygienist. The article How Not To Get Away with murder expressed the factors of what come with murder and how you should think before you make decisions that you may regret in the future.-I would describe the authors writing style and a way of which the author establishes story telling very informative and very well detailed. The author chronically talks in third person and talks about the events that led up to her being followed and trailed by a stranger that grabbed her around the neck and put a gun to her head. The style is good, the article sequence is great it easy to keep focus and follow.
-The intended audience would be the public any individual that wants to know how to not get away with murder. Any individual that pursues and interest in knowing that factors that lead up to a murder and the components of what you should not do when a commenting a crime. This article would be for them.
-The author uses tone in a very well formal manner. The author simply explains the young female by the name of Nancy Howard story . The author states that Howard was chronically assaulted and trailered by a 20 year old male that she did nt even know.
-Literary devices that are clear would be amplification . The author goes into detail about Nancy Howard being murdered for doing nothing wrong. The author talks about Nancy Howard being killed and robbed for a purse and her family her husband name Frank Howard and her two kids named Jay ans Brianna. Author Michael Mooney also compares concepts and ideas.
-From reading this article i have not found the nut-graf of the story or a piece of information that is less important then the other. I think that everything that has been said is needed to be to said because this Nancy Howard story this happened to her. The author talks about what happen to her and her life, the author tells Nancy's Howard story.
-The most key source in this article would be yes Nancy Howard but also Frank Howard and Richard Raley. Rich Raley made millions in iraq because Raley was one that offered Frank Howard the oppurtunite of using his private jet to travel back and forth. I found this weird because Frank was married to Nancy why would he need a jet to travel to travel back and forth and then he tells a woman by the name of Suzanne that he was not happy. So i think in the begging of the article the main source would be Nancy Howard because it was about her and her story but then towards the end of the article the key source turns into Frank.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this article and that would be challenging for me would be staying on topic keeping focus because throughout the article the author constantly transitions between current events. So yes i think stay on topic keeping focus and making the article has fluency would be difficult when writing this article.
-This article would be located in the variety section or the current event section in the school magazine because i don't believe the school magazine has a place where current events and crimes are talked about.
-The articles strengths would be that author Michael Mooney maintains formal tone throughout the article. Mooney talks to the reader in a very formal and appropriate manner.
-One specific suggestion that i would say would be to stay focus and this only because in the beginning Mooney discussed the homicide of Nancy Howard but then at the end of the story the article changes and talks about Her husband Frank Howard and Richard Railey. I think that when writing article its important to keep focus and the readers attention constantly because your reader looses focus because if not the reader often gets confused and is lost into what you are talking about.
Journal #25 A Rape on Campus: (A Brutal Assault and Struggle for Justice at UVA) (LongForm Article)
Summary: Assault and rape on college campuses and in general is unacceptable, unbelievable and intolerable under all circumstances. Not to long ago a young girl by the name of Jackie has reported that she has been rape and brutally assaulted by a male gang in a frautality. She stated that she was at a party one night and her date guided her to a private room and out of no where numerous men began to rape her out of no where. Jackie discusses the pain and suffering this incident has left her from those that new about it being skeptical and her beginning to doubt herself. Throughout the article the author states how Jackie an Innocent girl was disrespected and treated unfairly. Last but not least universities should be aware and take notice to all violence and assaults that happen on campus nationwide.
- I would describe the authors writing style as informative and expository. The author is telling the story in a 3rd and person and talks about the events that led up to a young girl name Jacky being raped and forced to have sex by men at a fraternity party. The author states How most are indecisive if whether they should believe her story or not because not all of the evidence adds up. When the author tells the story she chronically compares concepts and ideas, and states numerous amount of facts and information.
-The intended audience would be any body that is interested in knowing about crimes and assults that happen on a college campus. Anybody that has an interest in knowing the factors that can lead up to rape and assult this article would be for them.
-The author tone is very formal . The author discusses Jackie's story in a very formal and appropriate manner, says what needs to be said without saying too much.
Literary devices that i noticed would be the great use of amplification because the author goes into details about what happened that night when Jackie was raped and assaulted the author talks about how Jackie was set up she was expecting it to be just her and her date but then was guided into a dark room with numerous other males that had been drinking and had numerous of narcotics. The stated that Jackie talked about being raped man after man and being brutally assaulted.
-I have to say i think for this particular article their is not a nut graf paragraph or any important piece of information that is stated, everything that is stated needed to be stated. The author tells Jackies story and the events that led up to what happen and how jackie as a victim was effected. The author mentions how most survivors of rape began to doubt themselves as other students on campus, remained skeptical and in silence.
-The most key source in the article i have to say would be the University Of Virginia because its their job to know how to handle situations like this accordingly. Jackie would be a key source as well because this is her story, this is what happened to her and this something she will probably remember for the rest of her life.
-Challenges that come with reporting this article and that would also be challenging for me would be having a balance between knowing how much to say and how much not to say because when telling this story you have to he careful you don't tell too much but that you tell enough because you want to tell the story thoroughly so that its complete and well accurate.
-This article would be located in the variety section only because i don't believe we have a section that explains current events and crimes that have happened and occurred at different college campuses.
-Their is really not one specific piece of suggestion that i could say to improve this article i think author Sabrina Eudley did a good job with reporting this article appropriately. Eudley says enough but not too much she also states plenty of facts and goes into great detail about Jackie's story.
Journal # 26 -How NYPD is using social media to put Harlem teens behind bars ( Long Form Article)
Summary: Over the last decade their has been numerous amount of teens communicating through social media to commit violence. Numerous of teens that live in not so good neighborhoods have now been most likely to be influenced and involved into violence with gangs and rivalries. Throughout the article the author talks about Good fellas group how each person that was a Goodfellas member was to be considered family and they each were to have each others back at all times. A young male by the name of Asheem talked about how their group over time began to have a lot of rivalries with groups in others area. Author Ben Popper did a good job with informing, entertaining and most importing exampling of how teens use social media to put Harlem teens behind bars.
- The articles style and the way of which the article establishes story telling is very informative and explanatory. The article talks about teens communicating through social media to commit crimes and assaults against other people.
-The intended audience would be anyone that peruses an interest in wanting to know about how NYPD uses teen communication through social media. The audience would be adults as well or even people from the police department.
-The author uses tone in a very formal manner. The author insures to explain the factors that come with teen's being in a gangs and teens. That teens that are often in bad neighborhoods and areas are to be surrounded in bad circumstances that may influence them to intrude in gangs, murders, and a numerous amount of violence.
-Literary devices that the author uses is Juxtaposition by often comparing different concepts and ideas, amplification is used as as well the author goes into a lot of wonderful facts and states plenty of supporting details. For example when the author talks about a women by the name of Alethia Henry and how her son's often witness different gangs and rivalries in their neighborhood and have had most of their friends turn into enemies. Analogy is also used because the author does a lot of comparing and contrasting.
-The style does not get in the way of the story, I think the style is perfect. The article is very well organized and easy to read through fluently.
--I have to say from reading this article i do not believe their is a nut-graf of the story i think that everything that is said needed to be said. The author did job of saying enough but not too much.
-The most key source of this article would be a young male by the name Asheem because he often talks about his clique that he was affiliated with that made him feel safe and that was always their for him. He was apart of GoodFellas crew and he believed that if one member was to be messed with his crew that the whole crew would jump in and retaliate. The author talked about how GoodFellas crew was not be a violent organization by over time that is what it began because of competition with other crews in their neighborhood.
-Challenges that would come with reporting this story and that would also be challenging for me would be knowing how much to say and knowing how much not to say because you want to insure that you into great detail but you do not want to say ti much because some information should remain confidential because it is personal.
-This article would be located in the variety section only because in the school magazine i do not believe we have a place that talks about current events and about teenagers using social media to commit violence.
-The articles would be that the author goes into great detail and the authors style i have to say that when reading this article i was not bored, i wanted to continue reading to know about the full story. The author's did a good job with informing and explaining the story so that the reader would develop a clear understanding.
-One specific suggestion that i would suggestion would be to do a where are they now piece, this way the reader can continue to read about the brothers that were from Harlem and be informed of where they are at now. The follow up piece could state weather the good fellas group is still a group now? Does their group still have many of rivalries with diffrents cliques in Harlem now? I think if the author continued the story of the Goodfellas group and not even how Nypd uses social media to tracks but he actual story of Goodfellas that would be really good and entertaining for the reader.