The Writer's Voice #2
Teachers, students, parents celebrating writing
What is it?
A personal narrative...what does it need?
Criteria for a good personal narrative.
2. A focused topic that answers the prompt.
3. Details that "paint a picture" for the read and are connected to the prompt.
4. Word choice that makes the reader linger...or stay engaged in the pictured moment.
5. Well constructed varied sentences.
6. Strong conclusion.
How to help "paint the picture" with details. A strategy to try.
What is it?
What does it look like?
Why is it important?
If I am writing about picking Daisy up from the shelter as my "surprising time," I want to develop the first thing I noticed about her. Then I can move on to the next happenings.
I first saw her eyes. They were round and chocolate brown with a tinge of mischief. They were eyes that melted my heart. Eyes that greet me every day with unconditional love.
*In the fast world we live in, it is important in a personal narrative to not be too list-like. Stay on an idea long enough to make your reader understand the reason you chose to put it into your essay.
Cole's Writing
Kaylen's Writing
Her ending is powerful and her writer's personality come through loud and clear.
Akash
I do love his ending...a fun twist:)
Achal Dhruva
Achal Dhruva
Tess
S. Roberts
She creates such suspense with her words that you must keep reading. Personal narrative perfection even to the very end.
Makoto
Olivia J.
:)
P. Jensen
I think all little girls would treasure a dad's memory of their birth. Olivia is indeed a lucky girl.
Joseph
And, I would like to go fishing in South Africa!
Sophia
:)
Mrs. Peterson
Madisyn
:)
Christian
He uses the circle back or echo ending which is a good strategy.
A. Hellmund
Her beautiful ending ties up the piece with loving appreciation of her rescuer, Mike.
Olivia L.
She uses details and transitions beautifully.
Gracie
:)
Mr. Stribling
Olivia P.
Also, the focus word "surprising" would have made the ending warm and connected...just like the toasty fire:)
Leah
And I love that...no surprise!
Steinberg CEO
But, mother and daughter both ended with Jazzie being accepted and loved as a member of the family.:)
Beckett
Although it is a list, enough details are added to make it an enjoyable essay to read.
Yuni
:)